Edally Academy Chapter 52c - When our Leaders Wore Red & Were Competent

[aldersprig]

Saydrie rescued her. "...we forget that our Emperors' ancestors once had to undergo seven tests to be considered worthy to even be in the succession, and that our Governors and Emperor all were once kalōkāt; war-leaders, leaders who had been proven both in battle and in peace.  We forget that we be

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[thnidu]

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• Taikie stopped forward.
→ stepped

• “You know, if this is a matter he wished to have quiet,” Elalekorra lowered her voice and stared directly at Enrie, “You could be in a lot of trouble.”
→ Lowercase "you" for the second part: it's not a new sentence, but a continuation of the first part.

• readily available in a school library
→ It was there, but iirc hardly readily available. Didn't they have to find it in concealment? Or am I confusing this with another story?

[aldersprig]

As for the third one, Taikie is.... exaggerating "readily available" in her friend's defense.

[thnidu]

(Facepalm) Oh, of course!