Unforgivable, a story for the OrigFic Bingo

[aldersprig]

To ysabetwordsmith's prompt to my January OrigFic Card.

This fills the "Betrayal" square.

Content warning: suggested self-harm, vague.












"You weren't supposed to know at all."

"I'm glad I did! Tory, this isn't the sort of thing you should keep to yourself. You'll be better now."

"Ty, you can't just read people's private things. That was password-protected for a reason."

"Well, it wasn't like it was hard..." Ty was faltering. The staff had said five minutes. Maybe five minutes was too long.

"You hacked my computer. You read my private things." Tory was looking around the room. The window, no, no there was no way anyone could get out the window. Ty backed towards the door. There'd be no end of it if Tory got out.

"Tory, look at it! Look at you! I did this for your own good! Come on, you have to understand that."

Sitting in a hospital bed, in a thin gown, Tory didn't look understanding. If anything, Ty would have to call that expression "furious." "Come on, Tory. You understand. I did this for your own good."

"You violated me."

"I read your computer."

"And I ended up here." Tory stood up. "No. I don't understand, Ty. No, it's not okay."

The window was too small for anyone to fit out of. Wasn't it?

"Tory... Tory, I was helping you."

"That wasn't the help I wanted. You can go off and help someone else. Or better yet... don't help anyone at all."

The window wasn't too small for Tory.

Comments

[thnidu]

Oh, no!


(well written, but...)

[aldersprig]

Let's just assume it's a first- or second-story window...

Wow!

[ysabetwordsmith]

What an awesome story. Thanks for writing this!

>> "That wans't the help I wanted. <<

That should say "wasn't" above.

[finch]

Oh man, I feel so bad for Tory, and yet I understand why Ty did it. You pack a lot of implications in a small space; well done.

[outlineofash]

I love this. I love how you were able to suggest so much with so little.

[aldersprig]

Thank you so much!

[stardreamer]

Nicely-delineated tension between the need to confront a serious situation and the betrayal of trust. I do wonder if it might not be even stronger were Tory to say, "That wasn't the help I needed." Depends on whether you want to emphasize that sometimes people are helpy rather than helpful.

("Helpiness" bears the same relationship to "help" that "truthiness" does to "truth".)

[aldersprig]

Thank you!

And yes, I agree with you on helpy vs. helpful.

Hrrm, I like Tory's "wanted" there, because it emphasizes Ty going against Tory's wants.