A Locked Chest is Locked for a Reason

[aldersprig]

To kelkyag's prompt to my other bingo call.

This fills the square "A Locked Trunk."

"Come on, Radar." Beryl had a handful of kitty treats, not because she thought they would work, but because she was out of other ideas.

"It's a chest, Radar, and Aunt Eva told us to go look up here." Stone was still going by the logic-works-on-cats theory. Which might normally be the case with Radar, but right now, he was arched, spitting, and angry.

On top of the chest they were supposed to look in.

"We need g'Aunt Sarah's diaries. Aunt Eva needs them."

The arching settled down. "Evangaline - only Evangaline - should touch those," Radar snarled.

Beryl sighed. "Well, dragonhorns."

Even a Locked Chest must be unlocked: http://aldersprig.dreamwidth.org/1121042.html

Comments

[thnidu]

Did Radar the cat say that next-to-last line?

[natf]

That's what I wondered…

[aldersprig]

edited. 100-word stories leave little room for speech tags.

[aldersprig]

edited. 100-word stories leave little room for speech tags.

[thnidu]

Nu, that's part of the challenge, innit?

Still not clear, I'm afraid. If Radar is saying (snarling) it, delete the period after Radar snarled or make it a comma.

You could save words with
•"Evangaline touches those. Nobody else."
•"Nobody touches those but Evangaline."
•"Nobody touches but Evangaline."
•"Only Evangaline touches."

[aldersprig]

Nng. Okay, if it's really not clear, I'll fuss with it.

[thnidu]

Thank you. I think it's much clearer now.

Especially for someone who, like me, isn't very familiar with the 'verse and didn't know that its cats could talk (though it did seem a lot more possible than it is hereabouts). I'm sorry, I should've brought that to your att'n earlier in the thread.

[aldersprig]

Oh!

Oh, well.

*facepalm*

It would help, I suppose - I usually do Radar's voice in colored-text & italics, which I totally forgot until now.

(Or to tag this "theDamnCat," which is Radar's official name)